I hope this won’t piss anyone off, but many of you guys are English-speakers and I’m not. And still it’s about music and lyrics by a Sting-fan so it’s kind of related to the list anyway. I just wrote some lyrics (below) and I’d like some input on it (both language and content).

Goodbye Denise I leave you now

I leave you before we met

Goodbye is easy now

Nothing done, no regrets

Believe me my heart will never leave

It’ll always lay open and bleed

Like Jesus bled on the cross for us

I’ll always bleed for what never was

And in my mind you’ll always stay

So in that sense we’ll never part ways

I can not decide what would be the worst

To leave you right now or let you leave first

To tell you I love you and scare you away

Or just do nothing, let you lead the way

Here in my mind where you’ll always stay

There are so many things you’ll never say

Some of them good, but most of them bad

In my mind you’ll always be glad

I’ll take all my feelings, put them in a box

And I’ll lock them up with a thousand locks

Always within you, they’re yours’ if you please

You have been blessed with a thousand keys

I’ll tell you a riddle, I’ll give you clue

I’ll give you the answer, it’s you

Take half of my mother, or my sister indeed

Switch that with the second of the line in the lead

This town will always remind me of you

That’s where you fell, that’s where you smiled,

That’s where you smiled at me waiting in line.

How can it be

I’m in love with this idea

The idea of you being good all the way through

And the idea of me, being someone you’d see

Tell me what you think!

Cheers,

Patrik